Hilfe in Englisch

[eKs]TaSy

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30.10.2007, 20:04

Ich schreibe ne Arbeit morgen und muss mein Unternehmen vorstellen. Ich wollte mal Anfragen ob ihr mir nen par Verbesserungsvorschläge geben könntet für meinen Text.

I am working for Inometa. Inometa is a limited coroperation and it is divided into 3 business units: Rollers, Tubes and Coatings. These 3 business units are all independent companies, but they belong to the Inometa Group. Tubes is the first step in the producing-process. They produce tubes which are made of aluminium. The second step is Rollers, where the tubes will finished into rollers. Rollers is producing the main product, rollers of steel. It is the central of Inometa becuase the working processes are coming together, here. After that the rollers are coming to the last step: "Coatings". Here the rollers got their high end coating, which is called "Protek".
Inometa has also got 2 subsidiaries, which are called Harper Ltd. and Xperion Ltd. They are all located in the headquarter in Herford. If you count all employees of the company, there are arroun 300.

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GEC|Napo

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30.10.2007, 20:08

Du weißt vorher, was du in ner Arbeit machen musst? Würde vllt ein paar Nebensätze oder so benutzen, bei dir ist max Hauptsatzanreihung.
zb I am working for Inometa, a limited coorperation that is divided into three business units..

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pitt82

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30.10.2007, 21:23

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The second step is Rollers, where the tubes will finished into rollers.

Was soll das auf deutsch heißen?

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r3.s1n

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30.10.2007, 21:32

RE: Hilfe in Englisch

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I am working for Inometa. Inometa is a limited corporation and it is divided into 3 business units: Rollers, Tubes and Coatings. These 3 business units are all independent companies, but they belong to the Inometa Group. Tubes are the first step in the producing-process. They produce tubes which are made of aluminum. The second step is Rollers, where the tubes end up as rollers. The steel rollers are produced as the main product. It is the central of Inometa because the working processes are coming together, here. After this the rollers are put into the last step: "Coatings". Here the rollers get their high end coating, which is called "Protek".
Inometa also has 2 subsidiaries, which are called Harper Ltd. and Xperion Ltd. They are all located in the headquarter in Herford. If you count all employees of the company, there are about 300.

n ami kollege hat's ma korrigiert, aber die sprechen ja selber mit so vielen fehlern^^

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30.10.2007, 21:48

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Original von GEC|Napo
Würde vllt ein paar Nebensätze oder so benutzen, bei dir ist max Hauptsatzanreihung.

Word.

These 3 business units are all independent companies, all belonging to the Inometa Group.

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Methadon

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31.10.2007, 11:04

Muss wohl eher production process heissen und schau mal nach ein paar Thesauren for produce

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_Wanderer_Xen

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31.10.2007, 12:24

Hier mal mein Vorschlag:

I am working for Inometa, a limited coorperation, which is divided into three independent business units: Rollers, Tubes and Coatings. Being three independent companies, they form the Inometa Group. The first part in the production-process is operated by Tubes. Tubes which are made of aluminium are being produced here. The second part is Rollers, where the tubes are finished into rollers. Rollers produces the main product of the Inometa Group: rollers of steel. It is the heart of Inometa because the production parts are beeing brought together here. Afterwards the rollers reach the last step: "Coatings". Getting their high end coating, which is called "Protek", the production process ends at this point.
Inometa also got 2 subsidiaries, which are called Harper Ltd. and Xperion Ltd. They are all located in the headquarter in Herford. The company employes about 300 people.

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31.10.2007, 12:25

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31.10.2007, 12:32

RE: Hilfe in Englisch

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Original von [eKs]TaSy
Ich schreibe ne Arbeit morgen und muss mein Unternehmen vorstellen. Ich wollte mal Anfragen ob ihr mir nen par Verbesserungsvorschläge geben könntet für meinen Text.

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